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| Name: Chloe |
23rd December 2009 |
| really really good i wish i could right a story like
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| Name: Saagarika |
29th December 2009 |
| excellent !really good ,deserving winner!!!!
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| Name: Katie |
27th January 2010 |
| Wow, is a really good story!!
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| Name: Jasyendy |
30th January 2010 |
| I love to make stories and read some in my spear time...I got to say this is the best story i ever read so far! Well done and keep making wonderful stories!
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| Name: Jls |
31st January 2010 |
| fantastic story deserved to be winner
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| Name: Sarah |
31st January 2010 |
| I love this story SO much I've got a story called the tale of jack frost.
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| Name: Sarah + Millie |
10th February 2010 |
Because I love this story I will add this to my favorites!
Sarah + Millie
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| Name: Lauren |
19th March 2010 |
| if I was a judge I would give it 900000000000000
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| Name: Khan |
24th March 2010 |
it was a good story !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
and i am the showcase winner of this month.i wrote the story LACIE THE SCANTY MOUSE.and as a showcase winner i am telling you that this story is 100%.
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| Name: Sissy |
7th May 2010 |
| I like this story.It is very intrusting.
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| Name: Megan |
9th June 2010 |
| That was good, i enjoyed it :)
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| Name: Holly |
15th November 2010 |
| Loved it very long though. Because I had to read it to my sister Lucy but acCept for that marfullus
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| Name: Layla |
26th November 2010 |
| i liked it but it was to long
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| Name: Charlotte |
2nd December 2010 |
| Yeah a bit too long, but you know nothings ever great.
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| Name: Sanjeevan |
2nd December 2010 |
| I THINK IT WAS GREAT STORY BECUASE I LIKE LEGEND STORIES
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| Name: Fran |
8th March 2011 |
| this story is amazin you should be a writer one day plz make another myths yours are ausome you should be mrs victoria the writer once again i love this story :>
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| Name: Issy |
27th March 2011 |
| Awsome sugar has an a not an e.
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| Name: Victoria |
21st April 2011 |
| Thank you Fran that is very sweet, I will we writng more stories, infarct I'm working on one now ^^
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| Name: Rimsha |
27th April 2011 |
| Hi Victoria I see you won the Christmas Competition! Well done!
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| Name: Abbey |
20th October 2011 |
| well done i really enjoyed reading it it was so interesting good effort with the story.
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| Name: Gonzo |
28th November 2011 |
| I think it was a very nice story.
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| Name: Isabella |
22nd December 2011 |
| It was a great story and I couldn't make it any better.
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| Name: Romy |
6th January 2012 |
| hi that was a good story
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| Name: Unknown |
11th January 2012 |
| Nice story, but the author needs to learn how to spell. Suddenly not suddunly.
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| Name: Aziza |
16th January 2012 |
WOW! :O ... I'M SERIOUS ARE YOU A WRITER??
I MEEN WELL YEAH THE SPELLING IS MMMM BUT WHO CARES? YOU ARE SO COOL! MAN I WISH YOU WERE IN MY SCHOOL? ST.MARY AND ST.PANCRAS PRIMARY SCHOOL, YOURS?
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| Name: Jaksmith |
1st February 2012 |
| good idea but its too classic and the author needs to work on their spelling BTW read mine its called a story of hope by jak smith
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| Name: Victoria (the Author) |
29th February 2012 |
Hello everyone, first off, I would like to thank everyone for their comments on this peice.
Yes, some of the spelling is off as some of you pointed out, this was written when I 13 and I am now 16 and I've very much improved my writing since then.
I am currently working on longer stories that I hope will be published soon. None of my stories will be posted here anymore, I have not visited this website in a long time and I don't think I will be writing much on here anymore, though I may visit from time-to-time.
Again, thank you all very much, keep writing!
~ Victoria
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| Name: Jefferson Porter |
14th October 2012 |
| She should rewrite and publish it. It is a shame she never rewrote it for all to enjoy her ability to write a good story even then.
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| Name: Kailier |
17th November 2012 |
| I'm confused because people say Jack Frost died in a lake and he was the shepards boy and he saved his sister who fell in the lake and died with the stick in the ice. Is this true?
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| Name: Joy |
20th November 2012 |
| Wow its really not how i expected the story to go.there's nothing wrong with it ,but some people say he controls weather and is the spirit of chaos humanized.
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| Name: Allie Gator |
24th November 2012 |
| I loved the wonderful story! I few typos though. Merry (early) christmas!
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| Name: Ana |
25th November 2012 |
| i thought it was a boy who fell into a lake so he could save his sister and the last thing he saw was the moon.the moon created him.Jack Frost became a gardiant
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| Name: Peter |
25th November 2012 |
| You messed up some words, and I think you said reader too many times, and "why?" Isn't really a question
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| Name: Donoven. |
28th November 2012 |
I really liked this. The grammar mistakes were distracting but It was still very cute and an engaging read.
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| Name: Kait Lewis |
30th November 2012 |
This is a beautiful story. I love Jack Frost and have read many of his legends and this was as good as any of them. Well done!
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| Name: Ida |
10th December 2012 |
| Waow.. It's a really beautiful story! This is the first story about Jack Frost, I've read (besides, of the film "Rise Of The Guardians"), and I think it's a really sweet and beautiful story!
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| Name: Kirito |
11th December 2012 |
| Well, the notes that keep saying "Dear Reader" get very distracting... And the grammar was not best, along with spelling. But the story still deemed good.
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| Name: Rev George Smiley |
11th December 2012 |
| A lovely tale, reminding us that happiness and personal fulfilment have nothing to do with greed and avarice.
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| Name: Monkey 623 |
15th December 2012 |
| I love JACK FROST but i dont new his real story.
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| Name: Enedina |
22nd December 2012 |
| I like the story and why did jack didn't freak out when he was dead?.....
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| Name: Arianna |
23rd December 2012 |
| the spelling and grammar were not so good,and what happened with the blue dust what was that all about.
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| Name: Roland |
23rd December 2012 |
| I learned about Jack Frost after watching The Rise Of the Guardians.
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| Name: Amatu |
24th December 2012 |
| hey but in the rise of guardians ,ders a different story that he died young while saving his sister and was chosen as a guardian by the man in the moon!!!! btw dis story was heart touching and nicce but this was a fake story!!!
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| Name: Sage Talitha Pressley |
1st January 2013 |
| This story was sweet and heartwarming. I watched rise of the guardians and fell in love with the story of jack frost But the comments on this are not based on fact maybe u should research a bit more but I believe this is one of many different stories. well done
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| Name: Lola |
1st January 2013 |
| I would just like to say that just because something about Jack Frost featured in a film, doesn't make it true. It could be, but how would we know? Just don't trust films all the time.
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| Name: Onyx |
1st January 2013 |
| lots of people are saying in the rise of the guardians the story was different. there are many different types of the story of jack frost, and the rise of the guardians one is not the original.
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| Name: Crown |
3rd January 2013 |
| Just because a film illustrates how a person acted or lived, doesn't mean it is entirely true to everyone. If you choose to believe in what you see, then the truth doesn't matter in the end.
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| Name: Akealii |
5th January 2013 |
| i\'ve watched rise of the guardians an i think it is true
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| Name: Abi |
2nd February 2013 |
| I like it its kinda sweet but sAd but other than that i like it XD
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| Name: Pain |
5th March 2013 |
geez, i guess im suddenly interested to jack frost's story.. rise of the guardians is a great movie anyway kids so if u want more jack frost, watch it..
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| Name: Andrew |
16th March 2013 |
| sad story but rise of the gardians is happy
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| Name: Leah Glover |
16th March 2013 |
| Am it's ok but tell me this is Jack Frost rell huh tell me that
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| Name: Jack |
25th March 2013 |
| sad story rise of the guardians is way better. That movie should be the real story.
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| Name: Sammy |
29th March 2013 |
| Its a very sad story , but I agree with the others , Rise of the Gaurdians is way beter then this story !!!!
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| Name: Hannah Frost |
12th April 2013 |
| Good story but its a bunch of baloney.my couz is jack frost.
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| Name: Emily |
15th April 2013 |
| It does not matter if he is real or if another story is better. What matters is that the author gave you her best representation of somthing she believes. Though it was quite a dark, slightly gloomy story.
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| Name: Lesette Frost |
17th April 2013 |
| well the story did end in a sad gloomy way ...still i always think about jack not forgetting the promise he made with the mouse..which is a great example :)
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| Name: Feather |
3rd May 2013 |
| I think the other story where Jack Frost falls into cold ice water after saving his sister is a much better story. This story doesn\'t really make much sense....
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| Name: Saw The Movie |
6th May 2013 |
it has no conection to his powers until the last 10 rows i like this story weel done gj!(good job)
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