Once upon a time there was a princess named Esther. She was beutifull with short black hair,long eyelashes and a smile that lit up the hole world! Esther lived a castel in India ,she had very kind and loveing parents and a brother who helped her out once in a while, but made fun of her and how she looked.
Once while Esther was picking flowers in the garden, Esther reilized today was febuary 13 and tommorow was not only Valentines day but was also her birthday. Quickly, Esther ran inside and went to her closet (she was going to pick out a dress to wear for her party)It was a very hard desion because Esther was a princess and had many clothes but eventually Esther found the perfect dress. After Esther had found what clothes to wear,she looked for shoes .Esther picked out some beautifull high heells that were purple, Esther loved purple!
Then Esther had to go to sleep but it was hard to since she had been thinking about her birthday.Thenext morning Esther woke up with a big smile she got up and put her high heelles and ran downstairs. To her amazment Esther found a party with everyone she knew. Esther was the happiest girl in the world. After cake Esther went to play with her freinds in there huge backyard.thats the story of Esther the birthday princess!THE END!!!
Hey im comnmenting again i really loved your story its really creative but can i say you've made some spelling mistakes and that could make people give you the higher mark ill tell you
:heells - heels
:desion - decision
:space between the next morning
:and last but not least realized
Name: Kenya X
27th June 2012
I really like your story its sooooo good the name Eshther is a really nice name it reminds me of 1 of my best friends her name is Eshveer shes really nicew evern though your story is made up its really creative!!!!!! Kenya xx