A little boy went down a mysterious, small lane. Suddenly a storm began! He started to run but the evil witch uggl guggle was faster. A huge stag jumped out and startled the witch so much she stopped chasing the boy. She started fighting the stag. The witch raised her wand and screamed an evil enchantment. Then the stag lifted it’s head and blue light shot from it’s antlers and knocked the wand out of her hand. The witch dived for the wand just in time and got it before it reached the ground. The witch with her wand shot at the stag again. She missed, but hit a tree and set it alight, and the whole forest caught on fire. They were both killed.
The little boy ran home to the safety of his house, and told his parents of his adventure and the stag who had saved him. The next morning his family went to see the damage in the woods. They found the stags antlers and the witch’s wand. They snapped the witch’s wand because it was bad magic and walked to the nearby lake and threw it in. They knew that witches were afraid of water so the wand would be safe there. Then they took the antlers home and put them in a place of honour on the mantelpiece to remember the stag that had saved the boy’s life. The antlers brought the boy good luck and protection all his life.
Two hundred years later the small lane became part of a large park and lots of people came there. However, the lane was always said to be haunted. Whenever there is a storm it is because the stag and the witch are in the deepest part of the battle. The few walkers who are brave enough to go down the lane during the storm will see would see very faint shadows of the witch and the stag fighting. If you look carefully you can see that the witch is losing as she can not get her wand because she is afraid of the water. But the stag has regrown his horns finally, and they reflect silver in the ghostly moonlight. Then the park shuts for the night.
Wow Max! This is a great story. The vocabulary you have used is really engaging and I loved reading it. I read it to my daughter and son who also loved it - especially the ending - they would not like to visit that park!
12th October 2013
Fantastic! More stories please
18th August 2013
This was such a good story!!! Max, I never knew you had such talent! I hope you keep on writing stories for everyone to enjoy.