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The Lochness Death

A myth submitted to the site by Daniel Richards

Johnny Thompson was a small boy and had pale skin and blond hair. His eyes were as blue as loch Ness which was a darky blue and green. Other people would say he had 2 left feet because he couldn’t dance. His favourite food was cow burgers and mustard and his favourite song was kung fu fighting! He had two friends called Lincoln chops and Charles mason.

One night, Johnny was a-sleep on a cruise ship on his holiday on the dark and spooky LOCH NESS! Suddenly, there was a scream! Johnny suddenly jumped up and ran out the bedroom, then closed the steel and rusted door. John ran down the sloping yet posh hallways and then fell over to be dangling above a pool of blargar fish – they were dangerous and mystical creatures that had extinct in 1802. He suddenly climbed up with a rare wooden ladder from those days. Johnny remembered he was still in his bed underwear! He rushed to his bedroom as fast as he could, running up a slope with blargar fish at the bottom was hard but eventually he made it. He put on his red favourite shirt, a wool sweater, his blue jeans and finally his ripped leather shoes. He ran out of his room and up to the top of the top of the ship only to find...
“John, john, wake up john!” shouted Lincoln. “Who, what, where, why, when?” exclaimed Johnny as Lincoln woke him up. “Where are we?” asked Johnny sounding very confused. “on the cruise, REMEMBER!” answered Lincoln “there’s a creature, the loch Ness monster is up top. It’s bitten the boat and released a load of misty, dark water with a side order of blargar fish!” added Lincoln. So it wasn’t a dream Thought Johnny. ”I’ll be right.” He screeched as he slid down the white sloping corridor with pictures of each captain that owned the henneta combla – the cruise ship.
He jumped up to grab the bar of the ladder and climbed to the top only to find a bite mark on the back of the boat two cabins gone and the men’s loo! John looked around quickly to see the loch Ness monster going mental, it was massive, slimy, and green and in the shape of half dragon half snake!! Suddenly it spotted John with a knife in his grip, the monster let out a huge roar and splashed under the water like a laser guided torpedo!
Quickly John shouted “jump off the boat, monster under neath the ship! Jump, jump, JUMP!” suddenly there was loads of screams then someone shouted, “help it’s the blargar fish they’ve devoured my new leather shoes they cost me 45 shillings!!” then came another scream! “the water it’s flowing in my room. Help I’m trapped!” then John realised that the loch Ness monster had hit the boat by surprise!

John jumped down to the corridors and saw the man who’s boot had been eaten. He helped the man up to the top cabin then saw the woman with her room filling up with dirty water so he swam to her and yanked on the door handle. Suddenly, john noticed that the door was locked because it wouldn’t open then the women inside said as she choked on the murky water “the keys by the mat!”
john only just made out the words through the door. He still did a divers “ok” sign even though he couldn’t see the key. John carefully swam around the corridors looking for the key. But there was no sing of it. So Johnny swam back to the door and asked the woman. “where is it?” the women turned to the door and said “Over by the hatch to the top.” John swam quickly to the hatch and saw the key, then he grabbed it, turned round and swam to the door. He unlocked the door but it was too late! John picked her up and climbed up the hatch. He placed her up on the top of the boat and jumped back down.
“Lincoln! Lincoln! Where are you?” john spluttered. Then he remembered Lincoln had jumped off earlier. So john climbed up the hatch. He saw the Loch Ness monster, and angrily jumped onto it and stabbed it with a knife and ripped the skin off the monsters chunky body. Then John swam to shore.
2 days later john got treated very nicely and got a knighthood from the king then went to the ladys funeral to pay respects, but right no, to this day, you can still hear the Loch Ness monster roaring for his revenge!

By Daniel Richards
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Name: Mia 30th March 2013
Your vocabulary is amazing!!!! Remember to
read through your work and remember capital letters for names but apart from that you're an amazing story writer!!!!!
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Amazing I'm speechless because is the best story I ever heard.
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