One cold, cold night a unknown vistor knocked hard on the old rotting door of the palace.
"Hello who are you?" the little princess exclaimed.
"I am here to grant you a wish of a lifetime!" said the mysterious voice.
" Er.... I wish i have er.... Lots of gold!!" She said hopefully. What she did not know was that she was going to end up in lots of trouble!
She was having the time of her life. Everything she touched turned to gold! One day it became very, very hot and she had burnt her skin. She tried to heal her terrible burn but of course she turned to gold! She could do nothing. She was solid gold. That was the end of the little golden princess.
I like the seting but does it carry on because it goes to a cliffhanger I want to see the next part
Name: Casey, George & Cameron
23rd April 2013
A fantastic beginning with lots of good description and wow words. We liked the problem where the girl could turn everything into gold.
We would have liked a different ending maybe when the girl turned to gold everything else could turn back to normal.