A long time ago two girls Maddie and Sandy baked lovely doughnuts for the village for one dollar it, was a massive hit and everyone wanted them.
They were allowed two each but someone called Roman did not listen to this, he took twenty five a day leaving everyone with just least one crumb each. Roman also wanted the secret formula to make his own so he could save up for a footie-ball deluxe.
While the two girls were sleeping he went and stole the doughnuts and put a note down which said: "give me the secret formula or else!" The poor little girls wanted to know who this was from but did not want anyone to find out the secret formula. Out of the blue a boy appeared, he did not look friendly, he was very big and tall and smelt like sweets and doughnuts. The girls knew who the thief and the note writer was it was Roman.
He swiped the food from the girls but then ran into a god, he said "what you have done is not right learn your lesson fool!" The god turned him into a doughnut, the girls agreed to share this doughnut with others and they all shared them together forever.
you made a mistake, "...dollar it, was..." it should be "...dollar, it was..." you need to make it longer and with more detail. other than that, your story plot line was interesting, and it had a comidic ending. i liked it :)