Once upon a time there lived a poor family which had nothing to eat or drink. One evening a young handsome boy named Oliver went looking for something to eat and saw nothing but a very clear glow was coming from behind a tree "Hmm" the boy said and scrambled up to it.
There standing there was a beautiful strong and steady unicorn in amazement the boy stared and said "Wow will you help me please"
The unicorn said "Yes of course i will whats the matter"
The boy said "my family and I am very poor and sick and have nothing to eat and drink"
The unicorn said "ok" and off they plodded down the hill to the little tiny house which not even a animal could fit in. Meanwhile they got there there and the unicorn put a spell on the house and the people to be rich all there entire life and stay safe. After all they did and became a happy family with the unicorn.
I think the story was good but you have some mistakes. My teacher always says make sure you double check your writing. I suggest that you do that too. If you do you can became a better writer and write longer stories. I use to never double check now I write about 300 words when I write my stories